sentence does not give a reader the effect of distance.]

Better: We were surprised to see a house in the distance. _But
we hastened toward it with thoughts of a warm meal and a good
lodging. We entered the yard_, and went up to the door, and
knocked.

Exterior-interior transition needed: We noticed that the house
was built of cobblestones. There was a broad window from which
we could look out upon the small stream that dashed down the
rocky hillside.

Better: We noticed that the house was built of cobblestones.
_We went inside, and found that the living room was large and
airy._ There was a broad window from which we could look out
upon the small stream that dashed down the rocky hillside.

Cause transition lacking: The Romans were great road-builders.
They wished to maintain their empire.

Better: The Romans were great road-builders, _because means of
moving troops quickly were necessary_ to the maintenance of
their empire.

General-to-particular transition needed: Modern machinery often
makes men its slaves. Last summer I worked for the Chandler
Company. [This gap in thought occurs oftenest between the first
two sentences of a paragraph or theme.]

Better: Modern machinery often makes men its slaves. _This
truth is well illustrated by my own experience._ Last summer I
worked for the Chandler Company.

Transition to be improved by changing order: A careless trainer
may spoil a good colt. A good horse can never be made of a
vicious colt. [Here the order of ideas is: "Trainer ... colt.
Horse ... colt." Turn the last sentence end for end.]

Better: A careless trainer may spoil a good colt. And a vicious
colt can never be made a good horse. [Now the order of ideas is
"Trainer ... colt. Colt ... horse."]

Transition to be improved by removal of a disturbing element:
Our class in physics last week visited a pumping station in
which the Corliss type of steam engine is used. _The engines
are manufactured by the Allis-Chalmers Company of Milwaukee,
Wisconsin._ This type of engine is used because it has several
advantages. [The italicized sentence should be omitted here,
and used later in the theme.]

Note.--The divisions of thought within a paragraph may likewise be
indicated by connectives: _however_, _on the other han