Entering the store, a soda fountain is observed. Passing
down the aisle, a candy counter comes into view. The rear of
the store is bright and pleasant, caused by a skylight.

COHERENCE

The verb _cohere_ means to stick or hold firmly together. And the noun
_coherence_ as applied to writing means a close and natural sequence of
parts. Order is essential to clearness.

=General Incoherence=

=24. Every part of a sentence must have a clear and natural connection
with the adjoining part. Like or related parts should normally be placed
together.=

Bring related ideas together: Little Helen stood beside the
horse wearing white stockings and slippers.

Right: Little Helen, in white stockings and slippers, stood
beside the horse.

Keep unlike ideas apart: The colors of purple and green are
pleasing to the eye as found in the thistle.

Right: The purple and green colors of the thistle are
pleasing.

Distribute unrelated modifiers, instead of bunching them: I
found a heap of snow on my bed in the morning
which had drifted in through the window. [Subject
verb--object--place--time--explanation.]

Right: In the morning I found on my bed
a heap of snow which had drifted in through the window.
[Time--subject verb--place--object--explanation.]

Bring related modifiers together: When he has prepared his
lessons, he will come, as soon as he can put on his old
clothes. [Condition--main clause--condition.]

Right: When he has prepared his lessons and put on his old
clothes, he will come. [Condition and condition--main clause.]

Exercise:

1. He was gazing at the landscape which he had painted with a
smiling face.

2. She turned the steak with a fork which she was cooking for
dinner every few minutes.

3. Dickens puts the various experiences he had in the form of a
novel when he was a boy.

4. If the roads are made of dirt, the farmer has to wait, if
the weather is rainy, till they dry.

5. We received practically very little or none at all
experience in writing themes.

=Logical Sequence=

=25. Place first in the sentence the idea which naturally comes first in
thought or in the order of time.=

Faulty: We went to the station from the house after bidding all
goodby.

Right: We said goodby to all, and