ace some of the details in another sentence, or omit them.=

Faulty: In the town in which I live there are several large
churches, and about six o'clock one morning, in a violent
storm, one of these churches was struck by lightning.

Right: In my home town there are several large churches. One
morning about six o'clock, in a violent storm, one of these
churches was struck by lightning.

Wrong: In 1836, in Baltimore, Poe married Virginia Clemm, his
cousin, who was hardly more than a child, being then fourteen
years old, while Poe himself was twenty-eight, and to her he
wrote much of his best verse.

Right: In 1836 Poe married Virginia Clemm. Poe was then
twenty-eight, and Virginia was only fourteen. To this girl Poe
wrote much of his best verse.

Exercise:

1. The house with the red tile roof is the finest in the city,
and is owned by Mr. Saunders, who made his money speculating in
land.

2. Then the engine tilted and fell over on one side, and the
boiler exploded and added to the frightful scene.

3. The deer whose antlers you see over the fireplace as you
enter the room was shot by my Uncle Will, who is now in South
America on a hunting expedition.

4. The seeds, which have previously been soaked in water over
night, are now planted carefully, not too deep, in straight
rows sixteen inches apart, the best time being in April, when
the ground is soft and has been thoroughly spaded.

5. One day last week my employer, Mr. Conway, a jolly, peculiar
man, raised my salary, first telling me I was about to be
discharged, and laughing at me when I looked so surprised.

=Stringy Sentences to be Broken up=

=12. Avoid stringy compound sentences. The crude, rambling style which
results from their use may be corrected by separating the material into
shorter sentences, or by subordinating lesser ideas to the main thought.=

Faulty: The second speaker had sat quietly waiting, and he was
a man of a different type, and he began calmly, yet from the
very first words he showed great earnestness.

Right: The second speaker, who had sat quietly waiting, was a
man of a different type. He began calmly, yet from his very
first words he showed great earnestness.

Faulty: There are many stops on the organ which control the
tones of the different